Hey guys, i decided to post this here because it's not exactly general movie shit. I would really appreciate some constructive criticism on my idea for a post apocalyptic film. I’m a 15 year old aspiring director/writer and I’d really like to know what you think, please bear in mind that this is just some ideas and my first attempt at ‘script writing’ and it’s just the bear building blocks of a script.

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Plot: Nuclear war has broken out between North Korea and America, set in Australia, Melbourne a day or so after a nuclear bomb has fallen and radioactive fallout is approaching. We follow a group of soldiers (one cop) who are patrolling the cbd area to evacuate the populace before fallout radiation reaches the south of Australia.  Although the patrol group believes that they are helping civilians to massive underground bunkers in the country begins to unravel the horrifying truth of how incompetent the Australian army and government are and greed and cruelty of the remaining populace who have already begun looting the city.

Characters

(left nameless to represent the cloning tendencies of the army and just how expendable they are seen to be)  

Soldier 1: (Generic patriotic soldier, with unquenchable bloodlust) after failing to finish school due to low scores and low attendance rate, he resorted to joining the police force after in an attempt to start over. He has a burning love for his country, he follows AFL and Cricket passionately and is your typical Bogan. However a violent school lifestyle has caused him to obtain addiction for the adrenaline of violence, every time he must resort to even more extreme situations to fulfill his bloodlust. When statewide evacuation began and security protocol was thrown out of the window he quickly signed up as a peacekeeper. During his time as ‘peacekeeper’ he has killed over 25 people, only 5 have been reported. He found his way onto bravo team after he killed his last team who he had thought gone AWOL.

Soldier 2: (stubborn, emotionless sergeant) encouraged and inspired by His Father who was one of Australia’s top generals in ww2 he goes by a very honorably outdated code of honor that proves to be deadly and completely unjustified. The way he grew up he was always taught by his dad that respect comes after victory and that the winners wrote history. Although on the outside he is seemingly a hardened general who has learnt from the best he is in reality just the projection of his father’s expectation, while being emotionally slow on the inside. He has an addiction for sweet food and is unpredictable in the way he acts.

Soldier 3: (Smart assed comedian with fear of death) the most smart and mentally stable of the group. As soon as the evacuations began he was in a very small minority of people who didn’t think there were any ‘magical ‘underground bunkers located in the countryside. He also knew that it wouldmt be safe to stay in the city either , in a moment of panic he joined the ‘peacekeepers’ as he reasoned with himself that the soldiers would be saved, although he had to re assure himself plenty of times that there was no chance of actually being in a combat situation. It soon become obvious to himself that he isn’t going to survive the fallout and that the soldiers have been sent on make believe missions to occupy them from the blatant truth. His self destructive attitude he adopts near the end sends a chilling message to the viewer saying that even the toughest can’t survive in these pathetic and sad last days.

Soldier 4: (loyal soldier, in denial) Working as one of the prime ministers security team he had become aware of the situation after listening on conference calls between the world leaders. The shock that he suffers from that revelation causes him to go into denial and when he joins bravo team he makes no mention of the situation. He goes into complete isolation until 3 draws him out causing him to forget the horrific circumstances, but as the team begin to discover the truth he begins to slip back into regret and depression he then attempts to convince the team against their beliefs going as far as to lie about situations, radio reports and even lying about his prior work, Eventually he is found out and ignored were he slips into complete mental isolation until he opens up about the truth to 3.    

Government: (non-existent)Even before the first bombs dropped all the high ranking politicians had been communicating and working from across the globe and when the bombs fell and all outside communications ceased causing absolute chaos. No one claimed leadership, no one wanted to. What was left of government where full aware that fallout radiation out was less then 2 days away when they ordered the evacuation. The messages said that there were underground bunkers the size of cities located in the countryside; although obviously untrue they knew that the population was so desperate to survive that they’d believe anything. Although the government may be seen as the evil force of the film all they are trying to do is leave the doomed citizens with hope that not only did people survive but that they didn’t have to bear witness to the slaughter.